9:00 PM on 02.10.2009
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Mikey
The story so far:
A large automaton, closely resembling Niero's alter ego, is destroying downtown Destructoid City. Jim Sterling, along with Cybernetic Tiger Z come to the conclusion the Niero is being framed. Unable to take on the giant robot themselves, CTZ call in the help of the almighty RetroforceGO!, a crack team of individuals whose skills were honed during the old school era, when games were unforgiving ... and near impossible.
This weeks winning comment was from Technophile... kinda...
Panel 1: CTZ says "It could be Bernard, Crecente, or any number of people really. First things first, we should find Niero and get that thing back under his control"
Jim says "You're right. Let's go find the rest of the crew"
Panel 2: With that, they jump down off the roof to the docks and we see two vehicles. One is the jimmobile, it looks like this.
The other is the Sharkmobile. It's like the bike from Dark Knight only with a big ol shark head where the front headlight is.
(Full suggestion after the jump)
I had a little trouble with this one. I did try to get the scene with Jim and CTZ's vehicles in, but the page was way too squashed. Unfortunately, I had to omit it and just use the RetroforceGO! introduction.
THE RULES:
1. You have 24 hours from the time this blog was posted to suggest what happens next. After that, I'll choose the winning comment and the page will then be posted the following week.
2. Try to keep it relatively SFW.
3. You can only make a suggestion once per week.
4. Your suggestion has to fit on one page.
Will the next page be the big action scene? You decide! Leave a comment with your suggestion for the next page.
Previous pages
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Page #1: When it rains, it pours
Page #2: Enter ... THE SHARK!
Page #3: The plot thickens!
Panel 3: Hamza turns on the comm screen on the bike "Retroforce? Do you copy?"
[Panel 3 inset]
Five people are on the view screen in shadow. The one in the middle says "Hamza, so good to hear from you..."
Panel 4: The full panel is the view screen. The figures have stepped forward. It's Dyson in the front middle, Chad and Colette on the left and Topher and Stella on the right. All of them armed for battle.
Dyson says "I take it Retroforce is a GO?"
And end. :D
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Contest:
WOW!
Seriously, because you have the kind of amazing drawing skills that make me consider that.
That was... oh my.
Excuse me while I go change my pants and start on building m shrine of you.
2. It's fucking AWESOME.
3. It's so fucking awesome that there will never be anything more awesome than this on the Internet - ever. Shut it down, folks. Shut it all down, Mikey wins!
Is Summa going to be the Villain in this? Or will it be Heretic or Wiisucks maybe?
THAT IS AMAZIIIING
Great job Mikey!
At this point, we need some action, I think. A little excitement to set the stage for the RetroForce and their talent. Any evil army needs a foot soldier:
Robot Wolves.
As the RetroForceGo! Crew saddle up (They're gonna need a few vehicles, including the Amazing-Marine (Like the Rush-Marine, but with a dolphin) and a Shooter Ship, with Option Pods (to hold passengers even).
As the crew is about to roll out, the glowing eyes and faces of sinister Robot Wolves appear. "Its a trap!". RetroForce flexes their awesome skills against a few lupine minions to play out the page.
I wanna see an anti-climax happen. The Retroforce crew all get in their respective forms of transportation and arrive on the scene to have all their "vehicles" transform into a giant robot roughly 3/4 the size of the Destructor-toid.
The Destructor-toid is nowhere to be seen though. They all look down to see Jim and Hamza standing there looking kinda embarrased with Destructor-toid wreckage on the ground behind them.
"Umm...sorry guys. False alarm I guess" says Hamza over the radio to the Retroforce crew.
In all seriousness though, I'm awestruck of your work Mikey. I'm interested to know how you're going to handle action scenes though as I would figure they might be too much content for just one page.
YOU ARE AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Here's my suggestion:
Dyson looks at the assembled members of RetroforceGO! "Ready to commence Operation: Hi-Score?" Colette hops aboard her trusty Chocobo. "Something smells worse than the title of your average WiiWare game. There's no way Niero's behind this. I'll go ahead and scout Ground Zero." Chad looks to the ocean. "I might be able to organize an assault from the ocean side... I have a few friends out there." Stella steps forward with a look of grim determination. "You won't even be able to smell that robot's farts when we're done with it." Chad winces. "I don't like the sound of that, can you say 'puppy licks' instead?" Dyson turns. "Topher?" A close up of Topher's face. He slowly takes a sip of his slurpie. A slight grin appears at the corner of his mouth. The final panel shows an aerial view of the city, shmup-style, with the Destructor-toid at the top, looming like a giant end-boss. At the bottom, a ship resembling a dog-bee (bee-dog?) flies towards the giant robot. "Time to reverse polarity on this son of a bitch."
Cause,you know, he apparently has huge arms.
Also, HAWP should make a cameo.
@Mikey
Also, PAX. 2010. Be there.
As for possible suggestions for later in the storyline for me -- maybe there will be some nefarious plot they're trying to unravel and solve, that eventually leads to a puzzle. Be it DaVinci Code style, National Treasure style, or just simply some complicated puzzle game on a big screen that they need to solve to figure out the meaning of something -- I could be the Mind Teaser guy who looks at a complicated screen and puts the pieces together.
Also, if in act three you need someone to take a bullet for Niero to elevate the stakes of the story, I'd totally sacrifice myself to the last boss so Niero lives on and wins the game.
As for what my avatar dude could be like -- always wears headphones. Always. Uses CDs/DVDs as ninja stars, uses a Wacom tablet as a shield, and a PC mouse as a swinging weapon like a nunchuk or a lasso to get from place to place over big gaps. And wears samurai armor made out of keyboards tied to my arms, legs and chest :) When you hit me the keys go flying everywhere.
Seriously dude, keep it up, I can't wait to see where things go.
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My suggestion!
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The Retroforce gets ready to depart on a series of motorcycles resembling various classic controllers. As the rev their engines another character hops on the back of Dyson's bike. This new character is a brown eyed lanky moderately tall person of caucasian complexion with brown afro styled hair wearing a green t-shirt and a pair of standard blue jeans.
Dyson: "Who the heck are you?"
Colette: "And how did you even get here?"
Mysterious New Person: "Call me X, I'm here to help you."
Topher: "How the hell do you think you can help?"
X: "There's one thing this monstrosity isn't anticipating..."
Colette: "What's that?"
X: "...A noob."
*A single frame profiling the entrance of 'X the Noob' is shown. The Retroforce GO's with the noob known as X towards the crisis that Jim and Cybernetic Tiger Z are currently observing*
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Everyone is seen at the edge of the destroyed city looking at the destruction caused by the Destructor-toid. Silent for a moment the team steps forward about to take on the gaint robot but suddenly they all hear a voice coming from ahead.
"Sorry guys but I can't let you do that."
Out from the shadows emerges Rev Anthony decked out in his version of Gordon Freemen's hazard suit while holding a crowbar. The others are shocked and speechless.
"If you want to get to the robot you go through us."
As soon as he finishes five more shadows step to the frontline.
haha, na just tryin to try something different for the sake of a cheap laugh.
This was great by the way, keep up the great work Mikey